Wednesday, July 1, 2009

Experiment and Tradition - Journal Assignment - A Short Magic-Landscape Poem

The dusty book in the back of the mildew-ridden library kept screaming "Read me, read me!"
At a restaurant floating in the middle of a sea of pudding, seven football players in uniform started yelling, "Rare meat, rare meat!"
A blue rock in the middle of a group of green ostriches said, "Rapid movement, rapid movement!"
A lone tree covered in silverly leaves, but having no branches, said to a can of Dr. Pepper as it walked by, "Reinvest money, reinvest money."

Instructor Feedback
Great images. Don't change a word. But consider playing around more w/ line breaks. Oh, and a comma is missing after "screaming" in the first line b/f the dialogue.

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