First Sentence
"Only forty seven dollars in tips," Karen muttered to herself, "at this rate, I can't possibly replace Charlie's aquarium by the time he gets back from Cleveland."
Second Sentence
Her relationship with Charlie was just starting to flourish, and she blew it by knocking over the aquarium; the result-two fish saved, six dead, and her hopes for long-term relationship seemingly dashed.
Third Sentence
Waitressing had never been her long-term goal, but until this aquarium incident, she never felt like she wasn't making enough to live on.
Fourth Sentence
"Waitress," a man at table four yelled, interrupting her thoughts, "we've decided on the fish."
Fifth Sentence
After she took the order, Karen knew what she had to do: she would "borrow" two hundred dollars from the till, replace the fish, and hope that she was able to replace the money before she became an ex-waitress and a future ex-con.
Instructor Feedback
It's about creativity and how our creative energies don't always have a plan. That's what makes us artists. That's the logic behind this exercise, all the exercises we'll be exploring this semester. We must be willing to ride bolts of lightning, get burned, and create life with our pens or keyboards!!! Excellent work, James. Your effort and talent are exemplified in your writing. Gary
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